10/29

                Today’s class was at ILC as usual for Wednesday’s class. Each of us worked on our essays. It seems that they are a lot of people who are not doing about race. I am looking forward to reading each of their essays. I had tutorial with Rab during class and had some suggestions about thesis statements for my essay. As I mentioned in the last blog post, I am writing essay about the beauty contests, and in my opinion, the beauty contests are good for women. Since I had this thought vaguely, I had to clarify why I think the beauty contests are good. The majority people think that these contests are harmful for women, and there are also a lot of critiques from feminists. My essay will not be persuasive and interesting if I ignore those accusations. In order to make my essay interesting and attractive, I have to find ways to deal with those critiques. It was really good for me to have tutorial today, because I could get the helpful feedback about my thesis statement and realize that it is still not strong enough to make my essay strong.

                We also decided our peer editors today. Our original group members were 7 people, so we decided to divide this group into two groups. My peer editors are going to be Yuta, Yuka and Eriko. All of them are working on I am thinking about asking other friend to check my essay if it is possible.

We have to write final essay of first draft until today after one week. My thesis statement is still weak and I have to come up with something special in order to reverse the opinions against the beauty contests, which means that I have a lot of things to work on my essay.